Comments on: Charlie

By: 25 Hour Watch - Charlie Goes to Canada, really

25 Hour Watch - Charlie Goes to Canada, really — Sun, 14 Mar 2010 17:03:55 +0000

[...] Pt. 1 Pt. 2 Pt. 3 Pt. 4 [...]

By: 25 Hour Watch - Charlie and the Big Blue Ox Pt. II

25 Hour Watch - Charlie and the Big Blue Ox Pt. II — Sat, 16 Jan 2010 07:31:59 +0000

[...] Read Charlie Chapter 1 Read Charlie Chapter 2 Read Charlie Chapter 3 [...]

By: 25 Hour Watch - Charlie and the Big Blue Ox Pt. II

25 Hour Watch - Charlie and the Big Blue Ox Pt. II — Wed, 13 Jan 2010 23:51:35 +0000

[...] Read Charlie Chapter 1 Read Charlie Chapter 2 Read Charlie Chapter 3 [...]

By: 25 Hour Watch - Charlie and the Big Blue Ox

25 Hour Watch - Charlie and the Big Blue Ox — Sat, 09 Jan 2010 22:15:00 +0000

[...] Read Charlie Chapter 1 [...]

By: 25 Hour Watch - Charlie Goes To Canada, sort of

25 Hour Watch - Charlie Goes To Canada, sort of — Thu, 24 Dec 2009 02:43:25 +0000

[...] Charlie Pt.1 [...]

By: BM

BM — Mon, 21 Dec 2009 02:28:30 +0000

Best comment ever. Thank you Michael Scott

By: MS

MS — Sun, 20 Dec 2009 19:09:42 +0000

I agree with Chris, is good stuff, strong voice, I like the slightly jagged narrative but we need more. I particularly like the term “morning rise,” a very good description. One typo though, Canada is never beautiful, regardless of the time of year. It is populated by angry hockey players and rabid moose. Everybody drives pick-ups and children battle each other on the streets for the last scrap of salted beaver meat during the long harsh winters which last for 18 months at a time. But I digress. Do you have a developed story for Charlie?

By: Chris

Chris — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 03:10:28 +0000

So, I really liked it. I liked your short sentences and his pov. I think it has a cool feel to it. My one bit of feedback would just be to do more. I kinda wanted to know more about where he started, what provoked his change and if he’s really going through with any of his plans (Canada, etc.) I feel like my Rick character is delusional in what lifts his spirits, he sees things that aren’t there, and I wonder if Charlie is the same or if he’s really going to go to Canada.