A couple of suggestions: I think the feel and form of the stanzas could be improved if you removed much (or all) of the punctuation, particularly commas and periods. There isn’t consistency with punctuation within the poem anyway, and the parts without work better for me. Additionally, consider removing the “we” in that second to last stanza (so it would read: “Open palms/touch cool red rock”). The blatant introduction of an active participant so late in the poem pulled me from the stanza. Subtlety would keep the mystic feel more intact.